Better Script Notes

Jason Hellerman, writing for No Film School, explains How to Critique a Screenplay (While Not Being a Dick).

He begins with:

“Screenplay critiques serve many purposes in the screenwriting process. First and foremost, they offer valuable feedback to the writer, identifying strengths and weaknesses in their work. This feedback helps writers refine their scripts, making them more engaging and effective.”

Jason distinguishes the various types of notes:

  1. Coverage: Coverage is a summary and evaluation of a script, typically prepared by a script reader or industry professional. It provides an overview of the script’s strengths and weaknesses and includes a recommendation on whether the script should be considered for further development or production.
  2. Development notes: Development notes focus on the creative aspects of the script, offering suggestions for improving the story, characters, and dialogue. These notes are typically prepared by producers, development executives, or other industry professionals involved in the development process.
  3. Writer-to-writer notes: These notes are provided by fellow writers, offering feedback and suggestions from a writer’s perspective. They can be informal, such as comments exchanged in a writers’ group, or more structured, such as a script swap or feedback session.
  4. Line edits: Line edits focus on the script’s grammar, spelling, and formatting. These notes are typically prepared by a script editor or proofreader and help ensure the script is polished and professional.

Jason provides some best practices for giving feedback:

  1. Read the script thoroughly: To provide meaningful feedback, you need to have a deep understanding of the script. Take the time to read it carefully, and make notes as you go. This will help you identify areas for improvement and provide specific examples when offering feedback.
  2. Focus on the big picture: Before diving into the details, consider the script’s overall structure and story arc. Are there any plot holes or inconsistencies? Are the characters well-developed and engaging? Addressing these fundamental issues should be your priority when giving notes.
  3. Be specific: When offering feedback, provide clear examples and explanations to support your observations. This will help the writer understand your perspective and make it easier for them to address the issues you’ve identified.
  4. Offer actionable suggestions: Instead of simply pointing out problems, provide suggestions for how to improve the script. This will make your feedback more valuable and help the writer feel empowered to make changes.
  5. Be respectful and supportive: Remember that your goal is to help the writer improve their script, not to tear them down. Offer praise for the aspects of the script that work well, and be empathetic and understanding when offering criticism.
  6. Don’t be a dick: Seriously, I don’t know how many times I have to add this in there. Your job is to help. Not hinder.

Jason recommends a critique template that covers:

  1. Story/Plot: Does the story have a clear and compelling arc? Are there any plot holes or inconsistencies?
  2. Characters: Are the characters well-developed and interesting? Do their actions and dialogue feel authentic and consistent with their personalities?
  3. Dialogue: Is the dialogue realistic and engaging? Does it move the story forward or feel extraneous?
  4. Pacing: Is the story paced effectively? Does it feel too slow or rushed at any point?
  5. Structure: Is the screenplay structured effectively? Does it follow the traditional three-act structure or another effective structure for the genre?
  6. Themes: Are there any themes or messages conveyed in the story? Are they effectively communicated?
  7. Tone: Is the tone consistent throughout the screenplay? Does it fit the genre and subject matter?
  8. Setting/World-building: Is the setting or world of the story well-established and believable?
  9. Visuals: Are there any scenes that would be particularly visually striking on screen? Are there any scenes that could be cut or condensed to improve the visual storytelling?
  10. Overall Impression: What is your overall impression of the screenplay? Would you recommend it for production?

My take: When folks ask me to read their work, I always agree and then ask them what they’re looking for. I praise what I love and strive to provide at least a couple of suggestions for improving problematic bits. Hopefully one idea triggers something the writer can run with and make their own.

How to come up with movie ideas

Ever get writer’s block, or need a movie idea quick?

Script Reader Pro suggests 5 proven ways to unlock original movie ideas.

1. Turn off your phone and get outside. (Let your mind wander. Cue “Fixing a Hole.”)

2. Study other writers’ loglines. (My favourite: “Transported to a surreal landscape, a young girl kills the first person she meets and then teams up with three strangers to kill again.“)

3. Plunder real life. (Omg, that weird thing that happened to you or your relative might be the genesis of a great story!)

4. Focus on what moves you. (Your expertise will make your protagonist interesting.)

5. Forget “what if?” and relax. (Not sure about this one. “What if?” is one of my favourite questions.)

My take: lol! I only come up with one killer idea once every 1,000 days!